Good hyperventilate
Bad: hypervenlate
I just realized that vent is in hyperVENTilate. So maybe this will help. Sometimes one may panic if they feel they can break. So they start to hyperventilate to clear the air vent / throat for air.
Can you think of a better idea? If so, please give your suggestion in the comment section of this blog.
Content gained from Carol Louise Streeve I had Stephanie Jaetger: attached but I’m not certain which presented.
I had the chance to attend the Utah Writers League conference this year because of the generously of a fellow writer, who couldn’t go. Here are my notes.
1. Select words wisely. Lie: don’t need sat down> cut down. Completely destroyed> cut completely.
Avoid conflicting words.ie: Nearly entirely,
Select words wisely.
Avoid redundant, unnecessary works
All words need a reason to be on the page.
Modifiers: If it is important to have certain hair put it in, if not leave it out.
2. Avoid clichés. It can date your work. They are considered lazy writing.
Exchange it for a while when during
Break up sentences to flow easier.
3. Action: shorter sentences will advance your action scenes.
Use proper order of actions. Cause and effect. Action first cause second results
Dialog: said and asked are the most popular to use. Maybe 90% of the time as they are invisible.
Condense your sentences.
Not all dialog is spoken
Editors look for too much white space or too little white space both can be a cause for rejection.
Summary vs dialog: let conversations, not a summary, advance the scene. Shows personality. Let’s you picture it more.
4. Hook your readers. The first hook needs to be in the first 13-15 lines. Avoid info dump in first the paragraph.
Show conflict in first 10 pages.
Ex: Michael Vey: “have you found the last two?”
18: the bullies are zapped by their target.
Ex: Hunger Games:
1 “of course, she did. This is the day of the reaping.”
16: the reaping begins.
Ex: Harry Potter:
They were the people you’d expect to be involved in anything mysterious.
15: Harry left to be raised by the Dursleys.
5. Foreshadowing with caution:
Drop hints.
Telegraphing is giving away too much too soon and runs the suspense.
Sees if it’s necessary
6. Use active not passive voice.
watch for any form to be (am, are, is, was
Ex: She is running > she ran.
Look for actions in the sentence. She was caught by a police officer.
is the person or thing doing the action at the front of the sentence.
Ex: The police officer caught her.
7. You can’t bring a gun on stage and not fire it. Known as Chekov’s gun.
Use the person or object or say why you don’t’
Let your hero be heroic. Make sure one character overshadow the other. Also, avoid unnecessary characters.
Bonus: New paragraphs
New topic
New time
New place
New person speaking
New to produce a dramatic effect
When a character talks in more than one paragraph; the previous paragraphs don’t need quote mark if they continue dialog to next paragraph.
If there is something you don’t like it, fix it. Otherwise, it will bother you.
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These notes are from a webinar offered by Fidelity. Any misinformation is the fault of the note taker.
– Think about money and how to spend your time.
– You can start planning on how you are going to spend your time. Some set up an agenda early.
– Now retirees spend a long time retired and they are healthier.
– Someone may live well into the 90s.
– 62% want to retire for family and grandkids.
– 50% of couples can agree on why they want to retire.
– as you maximize what is next’ your values will help you make a decision. you want to make the most of your time in retirements.
– Life begins at the edge of your comfort zones.
– People have an identifier associated with a career and create a new identity as a person who is retired.
– As a couple communicate is important
– communicate at every phase about thoughts and ideas
– Plan actives that build on shared values.
– practice shared decisions making
– Be open and willing to compromise to be in sync.
– Questions on retirement:
– Do you have a support network or people you can call on for support?
– questions to ask for retirement:
– Q: who do you want to spend time with?
– Q: what do you want to do
– Q: where do you want to be
– Q: when do you want to do it?
– rule of thumb:
10 x annual retirement at age 67. If you have 30 K annual salary, you would need 300 K
– How to tell if you are emotionally ready to retire:
– Ask what are you retiring to?
– Do you have a network of support including doctors?
– Some say I’m way busier in retirement.
– there is the temptation to be everything to everyone. have a plan and plan with other. and put aside the things that don’t interest you. You need to be able to say no.
– Set expectations with loved ones of what you will or will not do.
– William bridges: the transition model book
– Suggestions on mindset:
– Talk to a financial professional
– know about the 10x annual income.
– Embrace retirements
– learn about resources about retirements such as websites ARP.org next avenue.org
– get in sync as a person
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Here are some notes from church. Any misinformation is the fault of the note taker.
– We believe that these ordinances, the first principles and ordinances of the Gospel] are: first, Faith in the Lord Jesus Christ; second, Repentance; third, Baptism by immersion for the remission of sins; fourth, Laying on of hands for the gift of the Holy Ghost.
– First, the true nature of Godhead.
– Second, learn about agency. We are responsible for our own choices
– Third, the pivotal role of the savior.
– Fourth, faith, repentance
– Life is not perfect.
– Life is full of up and downs. None of us are perfect
– Elder robin talk: plan of forgiveness talk was not a backup plan but was the primary plan.
– What was lost was found (in his own life)
– What was dirty was cleaned through repentance.
– We learn that faith is like a mustard seed and that if planted, it will grow.
– If you want to find stories of faith, seek out the book of Mormon.
– Alma likened faith to hope. Hope can lead to knowledge.
– Our own faith must be focused in our savior Jesus Christ.
– Through the ordinances of faith, each of us can be made more whole.
– Faith can eventually become a perfect knowledge.
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Good: catastrophe
Bad: castospherie
I just realized the most of the world ‘trophy’ is in catas-TROPH-e without the E.
Maybe this mnemonic will help. It is a catastrophe when you have a dead CAT AS a TROPHy.
And don’t have the y.
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I had the chance to attend the Utah Writers League conference this year because of the generously of a fellow writer, who couldn’t go. Here are my notes.
Cut out the meat and cheese. We have the wish to write a trilogy. One feels good about writing a book but writing it can be very slow.
Write short stories. White as many as you can in categories that you don’t normally write. In every general. Short stories are simple and to the point.
Start submitting in as many places as you can. Including free places.
Submitting it to the latest contest.
Intermittent fasting: volunteer everywhere you can as often as you can. It isn’t what you know but who you know, you need to position yourself so you know where to be.
Follow through on the commitments you volunteer for.
Set time aside for essentials. Keep everything in perspective.
Writing short stories gives you a chance to improve your craft and can help you come up with additional ideas.
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These are continuing notes from my weight class. The previous notes were about the importance of sleep. This is a continuation of that presentation.
– Lepton levels decrease, and peptide. and ghrelin increase Ghrelin (feel more hunger)
– If you sleep deprived the Ghrelin will increase.
– People who are sleep deprived feel more hunger. thinks they are hungry want higher calory foods such as chips, nuts and candy.
– People have a tendency to overeat on those high calorie foods.
– We have less energy for exercise or activity.
– Can influence our metabolic rate: saves higher.
– How our body handles glucose, less than 4 hrs. sleep for 20 yrs. 40% less able to clear glucose from their blood. Blood sugar was elevated.
– Set goals to improve your sleep
– Some notice they feel more depressed when sleepless.
– Response time is lower on the sleep deprived.
– Set a habit of sleeping pattern that is adhered to weeknight and weekends.
Sleep apnea: a disorder where your breathing gets interrupted through the night. It will increase your stroke and heart attack chances.
Sleep apnea systems:
– Walking up with a sore or dry throat
– Loud snoring
– Waking up with a gasping sensations
– Sleeping or lack of energy during the day
– Sleepy while driving
– Morning headaches
– Restless sleep
– Forgetfulness, mood changes, and a decreased interest in sex.
– Reoccurring awakening or insomnia
– The doctor has a screening process to see what to look for.
Things that interrupt your sleep:
– Stress
– Don’t exercise
– Not being able to turn off your brain at night
– Waiting for kids to come home
– Having a partner who has a different sleeping pattern than you.
– You need to find something that will relax you like a good book or a warm bath that tones down the body.
– Some like a long commute as it gives time to destress from work.
Environment:
– Change your environment that interrupts your sleep.
– Turn off the noise. TV etc. neighbors that make noise.
– A different pillow or bed can make a difference.
– The trick on travel is to take your own pillow.
– Correct temperature.
– Behavior: have a set schedule.
– Will follow a routine, like reading a book.
– Don’t eat before you go to bed. food just sits here that keeps you awake. Makes one uncomfortable. If you’re hungry maybe have a small snack to not walk up to hunger. Don’t go to bed too full or too hungry.
– Increase metabolism is done by exercise
Things to help to sleep:
– Some will create a relaxing place to visit every night in their mind. Use all your sense involved.
– Write things on a list to write things down so you don’t stew over there.
– Think of 5 things you are grateful for. Have mind think of positive things. Many say this really helps.
– Some will have stress dreams. Missing class in college. not completing something, lost or nightmares.
– Some need a fan or moving air to sleep.
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Here are some notes from a church meeting. Any misinformation is the fault of the note taker.
– Alma 37: 47 small and simple things
– Elder Oaks talk; small and simple things.
– Alma 37:6: by small things great things are brought to pass.
– Ether 12:7 if men to come to me I will show them their weakness. It will make them feel humble. If they humble and have faith, will make weak things strong.
– 1 Nephi 3:4:
– Alma 37: Lord God used men to accomplish great purposes.
– One missionary said I only baptized a dirty face Irish boy: that boy grew up and became a counsel of the twelve.
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Here is where to look things up.
https://elections.utah.gov/2018-election-information
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