Killer Openings

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This information is from some notes I took while attending a panel, during a previous year of my favorite symposium, Life the Universe and Everything. Those listed on the panel were: Jessica Day George, Dene Low, Lisa Mangum and Steve Walker.

– You must catch the reader/editor in the first paragraph. It will determine if the story is worth reading. Book must fulfill the promise given by the opening paragraph.
– First chapter should be geared to motivate the reader to care about the protagonist. First chapter also needs some hooks to motivate the reader to turn to chapter two.
– First paragraph is a place where the reader can be introduced to the character’s voice.
– Interesting hook first sentences: “It was a good night to go golfing in the grave yard” or “My aunt was the one who decided to feed me to the dragon.
– You can write your book and then go back to the beginning to rewrite the opening because now you know how the book ends and its purpose.
– Prologs need to be written about the character that the books are about.
– eight yr. old boys like fart jokes but children’s books can contain more content than body humor.
– Start the scene with something wrong.
– Things to avoid in an opening. You need to know your audience. Graphic violence and torture is not young adult fiction. The opening is not a good place to add a bunch of back story. Avoid a lot of backstory. Have interesting things happening. Some chapters have small conflicts that are different than the overall conflict of the entire book.
– You don’t have to spend the first 10 pages introducing the world. Let it be revealed throughout the story in context of the story
– You need to see where the story starts. Some books may need to start later several chapters into the book.
– Avoid page length paragraphs.
– The author of Dune wrote the book as if the reader was already familiar with the world
– When you write a fantasy you need to write a story that would only work in a fantasy.
– Don’t cram everything into the first chapter and have nothing happen later in the book
Do you have advice on how to make an exciting beginning to a book or story. Please feel free to share your ideas.

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List of links of Christmas stories

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http://holidays.kaboose.com/christmas/stories/xmas-stories.html
http://www.familychristmasonline.com/stories_other/other_stories.htm
http://www.santaclaus.com/favorite-christmas-stories.php
http://www.familiesonlinemagazine.com/christmas.html
http://forums.macrumors.com/showthread.php?t=16011
http://www.drlaura.com/b/Favorite-Family-Christmas-Stories/59540406483129002.html
http://the-office.com/bedtime-story/christmasfamily.htm
http://books.google.com/books/about/The_Everything_Family_Christmas_Book.html?id=cRgBkBWk_B4C
http://williamstreefarm.com/christmas/stories/stories-the-bacidor-family-christmas-traditions/
http://inheritanceofhope.org/childrens-literature.html?gclid=COGxzsro3LMCFYp_QgodXFwA3w
http://www.best-books-for-kids.com/family-christmas-traditions.html
http://www.focusonthefamily.com/parenting/holidays/making-meaningful-christmas-memories.aspx
http://christianity.about.com/b/2010/12/21/christmas-stories.htm
http://www.thoughts-about-god.com/christmas/
http://williamstreefarm.com/christmas/stories/stories-the-clark-family-s-christmas-tree-tradition/

Do you have a favorite site?

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Making what you learn in elementary school REAL

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Today’s blog is borrowed from some content of a story telling event I presented called Traits of a Hero. In the latest version of this presentation I present examples through story telling, history, fiction and movies of how what you learn in school is important. This is specifically geared for elementary kids but can be modified for all ages.

It only requires a reflection of my own childhood to remember that as a kid, I didn’t see how math, science and social studies was important to my life beside doing homework. I find that a good way to relate the importance of school is by identifying details in stories and fiction and show how those details are relevant to the solution of the story. If a child can see the usefulness of knowledge in a story, they might see it also in their own lives.

As a story teller I present a story called: War with Grandma. The story tells of a sixth grader who has three major water balloon fights with his grandmother. He finds her sneaky in battle and loses two days in a row. The third day he realizes a weakness if Grandma’s strategy and uses it to beat her on the third day. I later reference details in the story to various subjects in school.

Let’s make War with Grandma relevant to students in the classroom by implementing the concepts of history and social studies to the story. How did grandma and John fight their opponents? Grandma: grandma has an opponent who is faster and has better aim. She uses bobby traps to find out his location before John could attack her. John has an opponent who is not above being sneaky to win. He has to beat her by doing the unexpected. Here you can make references to historical events where opponents had to use their ingenuity to beat each other.

How about math and science? Beginning classes at school we learn 1 + 1 = 2. Kids learn sums and totals and about limited resources. John realizes that Grandma is thinking in the two dimensional realm. To win the water balloon fight he must fight at the three dimensional level.
Q: In the final battle between grandma and John why did grandma throw her balloons like she did? She threw her balloons from ground level to hit John who is on the roof. The balloons arched into the sky before they drop toward him. Here we can discuss gravity, motion, trajectory.
Q: What scientific knowledge was grandma using by installing bells in bushes and ducks under boards? Sound.

Now is a perfect time to provide some examples from real history:
1. The American Colonies had to fight a difficult opponent The British were known to have the greatest army on earth at the time. Maybe discuss the various battles, or the Washington’s spy network etc.
2. In Utah New arrivals have to figure out how to plan seed in a parched land. They resolved this by flooding the ground with water to soften the soil so they could plant. They used an irrigation system to distribute water to the parched land to keep plants watered.

In this discussion we can discuss three important traits of a hero: Brains, Courage and Perseverance. Let’s gives some specific examples:

Brains:
1. Q: How did George Washington accomplish a surprise attack against the German Hessians during the war of independence? He took advantage of his natural resources by crossing a river under the cloak of darkness and flog.
2. In the creation of the nation of the united states one of the founding fathers was a fellow by the name of James Madison. One might call him a book work with all the study he did. He and others studied a lot of books to get ideas on how to form a government. Others got involved too like John Adams, Thomas Jefferson and Benjamin Franklin. Each of them brought their talents to help create the United States of America.
3. A guy lived in Idaho and Utah, Philo Farnsworth at age 15 was plowing a field, it was very very boring. But it also gave him time to think. As a writer, I used to work several years at a sewing factory. Believe me, you get a lot of time to think. He was trying to figure out how a visual image could be transmitted across a wire. While plowing a field, he came up with the beginning of his invention. Doing line by line by line of plowing a field inspired him to create the television by first transmitting one thing line of video across the screen. Then it was followed by another line. Each was stacked on top of the other to create a whole image.

Courage: Lous and Clark were given the assignment by Thomas Jefferson to explore the American frontier. One only needs to read their journal entries to learn about their challenges against the elements, the land and limited resources when they no longer had beads to barter.

Perseverance: Alexander Graham Bell inventor of the light bulb, telephone, phonograph, metal detector. It didn’t come easy. Often he experienced failure after failure after failure. A reporter asked what do you think of all your failures? I think of them as ways they don’t work.

As a writer and story teller, it is my and others goals to make a story as exciting as possible. The author of Harry Potter accomplished this. I learned she would have something new happen in her book every 4 pages. Writers also want to do what is called the try/fail cycle where there is a problem in the story. The hero tries to fix it. The problem gets worse. Three tries and in the end the hero finally wins.

So let’s discuss the traits of a hero from fiction’s perspective. What a etter examp.le than Harry potter. Let’s discuss the traits of the hero of harry:
1. Courage: harry fights the snake.
2. Perseverance: Harry has been bitten by the snake. Does he give up? No
3. Brains: Harry doesn’t know how to release Ron’s sister from the book. He sees his resources and uses the fang from the snake and impels it into the book.
Hermione and Ron also go through their hero’s journey.

If opportunity permits you can also touch upon the movie Lord of the ring and discuss the heroes journey of each of the four hobbits.

This is a combination of using storytelling, Fiction, movies, real history and School Topics in a classroom. Make them all connect in the pretend and it is easier to relate character and knowledge into the now.

What ideas do you have on this discussion?

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Play acting to manipulate the media or home viewers

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I realize that the US media will alter how they report news in order to alter the perception of the viewer. I have a list of examples on my Vent page.

It looks like other countries do it as well. For tonight, here are some Palestine examples.

1. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pgQLGYb9Xfo
2. http://www.theblaze.com/stories/gaza-man-fakes-injuries-to-create-anti-israel-media-bias-heres-the-video-evidence/
3. http://adland.tv/content/horrific-fake-ad-week-subaru-car-running-over-palestinian-children
4. http://partisan.blogs.hopelesslypartisan.com/item_13436.htm

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Spelling Probably

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It can only take a wrong few letters to get a word wrong. I would often spell this word as probrably because with my pronunciation I put in a r.

Something that might help me with this word in the future is to think pro-baby and then put a L in it which results in
pro-babLy

How do you remember the spelling of this word? Please provide suggestions in the comment section of the blog.

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How to scare people:

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Tonight is a very short entry. This is from some notes I took at a presentation by author, Dan Wells, during a previous year of my favorite symposium, Life the Universe and Everything. Since much of the presentation was displaying movie clips the text is not as many notes as I have taken at other panels I attended but there is still useful advice. Dan’s panels are always an entertainment. He has excellent humor and good counsel.

– Breaking the normal and make it unexpected. First you must establish what is normal than move out of normal. You need to establish what is common between the characters and then it breaks out of normal when something unexpected happens. Guy talking on phone to woman until he reveals he is watching her.
– Making it unnormal like appliances that act on their own as in the movie ET.
– Waiting for the other shoe to drop. This phrase came from a story of a guy always hearing two shoes drop each night from the apartment above him, night after night. He learns to expect it each night. Then one night only one shoe drops. Audience always knows there has been a shark attack so the main character is waiting for it to happen again and audience is delayed in seeing the shark attack and thus builds the tension. You can build tension by false starts. Tension builds in jaws because protagonist can see shark in water because people are in the way.
– Pushing the fear buttons by having audience experience common fears. I think the movie was minority report (haven’t seen it) people experienced freezing, suffocation, invasion of privacy, things poking into your eyes etc.
Please feel free to give additional suggestions you have on this topic in the comment section of the blog/site.

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Creating a simple program book:

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My new position in church is Relief Society Program maker and I volunteered to help put together a program for a story telling conference. So today’s How to” topic is how to create a simple program book. I will reference the story swap in my examples.
Many people will create a word default page that will split the page into half right from the beginning. Sometimes it seems to make the text easier to reader when the length of sentences fills half a page rather than a full page when there is small text.

Relevant information would is the name of the story teller, the name of their presentation, a brief description of their workshop and time slot. Some programs include brief bios and photos of the tellers or presenters. To be self-serving, I’ll present one such example:

1:00 – 2:15 library

Melva Gifford: Traits of a Hero:

Traits of a hero is a workshop illustrating to the audience three traits of a Hero: Brains, courage and perseverance. We reference popular children’s books and compare heroes of history.

Traits of a hero then wraps up by having the group solve a make believe scenario. Students must employ the knowledge of science, history, social studies and problem solving skills obtained in school to solve the scenario of ‘Save the Wizard’.

I included photos of people laughing as that is a common trait of storytelling and the logo of the company, Kneaders, who is providing the meal. A fellow teller has made a wonderful grid that would be nice to have in the center of the program book for quick access.

If you have free space you might be able to provide relevant information that would promote the organization that the program is about. Or maybe some cute picture to provide ‘white space’ and to add variety in the program.

What else do you feel needs to be added to this topic? Please feel free to share your ideas.

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Humor for teaching by example

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I hope this lesson will be of use to youth ministries, family counselors, family devotionals and family home evenings. The topic is a parent’s example.

Joke: Little League Parents

At one point during a game, the coach said to one of his young players, “Do you understand what cooperation is? What a team is?” The little boy nodded in the affirmative.

“Do you understand that what matters is that we play together as a team?”

The little boy nodded yes.

“So,” the coach continued, “when a strike is called, or you’re out at first, you don’t argue or curse or attack the umpire. Do you understand all that?”

Again the little boy nodded.

“Good,” said the coach. “Now go over there and explain it to your parents.”

We all want our kids to succeed so it is easily to get very involved in their sports, school and extra activates. The thing we need to watch is the temptation to live our lives vicariously through our kids. Too often parents behavior can embarrass them in front of their peers because of our actions.

Reviews your life and see what areas you find that you take over your child’s life. We might want to question why we do things and that includes what we have our kids do. We might force a child into sports when they might have a different passion.

As a couple maybe you can provide a hand signal when one partner feels the other partner is getting extreme at an event. Determine what is the child’s passion and what is the adult’s. if you want to teach your child to be calm in a stressful situation than one of the best ways is by example.

If you know of another joke or a way that you have found useful in teaching by example, please feel free to share it.

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Play tourist in your back yard

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I was down in ST. George Ut. on a writer’s retreat. While there a fellow writer and I decided to visit Zion’s National park.

What a beautiful park. There are such majestic towers and cliffs. For growing up close to the area it is amazing how little I’ve visited. People will travel from all areas of the world to visit Zions and it is but less than an hour from my home town.

My invitation is for each of you to schedule a day to play tourist in the city, county, state where you live and thus gain an entire new appreciation of its history and attributes.

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Difference between then and than

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thEn is timE and both sare E
thAn is a compArison and both share A

What ideas do you have to remember the difference?

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